Subject: Barbicue Party on Saturday
Date: Wed, 15 Jun 2005 13:12:40 +0200
Dear all,
The weather of Saturday (June, 18) is reported to be very nice and ideal for barbicue party. Therefore, the first barbicue party of this year is scheduled for that time.
As a practice, drinks including soft and hard will be supplied by the Student Association for free as well as grill coal and frames, whereas food should be bought by yourselves. Hopefully, you all will enjoy the nice weather and the party. Please do not forget to bring your play card for those who like it very much.
Time: 5:00 pm (June 18, Saturday)
Venue: lawn adjacent to Robert-Koch-Str. 38 (near Uni. Klinikum, there is a artificial pond there)
Please do me a favor to forward this email to those whose names are not in the list. Thank you!
Please do not hesitate to contact me in case of any question.
Expect to see you there!
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Haijun Yang
Institut für Waldinventur und Waldwachstum
4 回复：Grillparty am Samstag June, 18th 2005
第一句话：
错误：The weather of Saturday (June, 18) is reported to be very nice and ideal for barbicue party.
正确：The weather of Saturday (June, 18) is reported to be very nice and ideal for "a" barbeque party.
点评：不定冠词怎么可以没有。
第二段：
As a practice, drinks including soft and hard will be supplied by the Student Association for free as well as grill coal and frames, whereas food should be bought by yourselves.
1. As a practice这句话在这里有什么意义吗？
2. 这里连词用whereas吗？however, though都通顺多了啊。
这段最后一句：
错误：Please do not forget to bring your play card for those who like it very much.
正确：Please do not forget to bring your “playing card” for those who like it very much.
点评：扑克牌的名词都能用错，真无话可说了。
地址：
错误：near Uni. Klinikum, there is a artificial pond there
正确：near Uni. Klinikum, there is "an" artificial pond there
最后一段第一行：
错误：Please do me a favor to forward this email to those whose names are not in the list.
正确：Please do me a favor "by" "forwarding" this email to those whose names are not "on" the list.
点评：介词几乎都用错了。
下一句：
错误：Please do not hesitate to contact me in case of any question.
正确：
Please do not hesitate "contacting" me in case of any question"S".
点评：hesitate后面一定要加动名词，不加不定式。
这段最后一句：
错误：Please do not forget to bring your play card for those who like it very much.
正确：Please do not forget to bring your “playing card” for those who like it very much.
点评：扑克牌的名词都能用错，真无话可说了。
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这里还是还是有错，应该是Please do not forget to bring your playing card for those who likes playing it very much.
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